A Short Story *chapter one*
| There once was a little girl named Autumn. Autumn's mommy and daddy were divorced but lived near eachother. Autumn's mommy remarried a very nice and kind man while her daddy lived on his own and focused on just being as good of a daddy as he could be to his little girl. Autumn lived with her mommy and stepdaddy for half of every week and lived with her daddy the other half. Autumn was very happy with her two households and two families. And everyone got along very well. But after a few years, Autumn's mommy decided to find love outside of her new marriage. And pretty soon Autumn's stepdaddy found out about what his bride had been doing. He was very sad indeed for he loved Autumn's mommy very much and he didn't want to lose her or his new family. So he asked her to stop seeing her new love and to work things out with him. She agreed but she kept on seeing her new love. Autumn's stepdaddy asked her again to stop. But again she was only saying she would and kept on seeing her new love. Autumn's stepdaddy was heartbroken and knew it was time for him and Autumn's mommy to get a divorce. Autumn's stepdaddy called Autumn's daddy to tell him how and why things were going to change. Learning about this made Autumn's daddy very sad too. He was sad because he knew that his little girl was going to cry. She was going to cry a lot and for a long time when she learned that she was going to lose half of everything she had, half of everything that she loved and had grown up with. She was going to cry when she learned that she would lose her big house, her four dogs, her best friend neighbor, her big playroom and her beloved stepdaddy. And Autumn's daddy grew scared because he didn't know how to tell his little girl that her life was going to change or how to tell her why she was going to lose all her things. And Autumn's daddy grew very angry at her mommy for acting very selfishly and for robbing Autumn of one of her households and one of her families. But there was nothing Autumn's daddy could do to make it better. There was nothing he could do to change things.So that night Autumn's daddy gave his little girl a very big hug and a very big kiss goodnight then sat on the couch and cried. He cried because he knew what he had to do the next day. And he didn't want to do it. |
said the voices in bricotrout's head around 12:58 AM
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post a commentNothing but the best to Autumn's daddy. I hope he finds the kindest and most loving words. And I hate for him (and Autumn) that he has to find those words.
My best...
So sad. Poor Autumn.
Autumn will be such a strong young woman because of these life experiences! ...Some would believe these events came about so later she can be the teacher for others who need guidance :)
As I sat here reading your story, I related to it all too well. My heart goes out to "Autumn" and to her daddy that he finds just the right words to let her know this situation and that she is still loved my all her family and that in NO way was any of this her fault. I'm sure daddy will hold her and make her feel secure.
(sending hugs to daddy as well..sounds like he needs them too)
There will probably be more tears in the chapters ahead but that, sadly, is the part of any good story. The protagonist is a strong character and I know he'll have a positive influence on the dear young Autumn.
Oh my, I'm such an easy cry. Such a sad tale ... but alot of sad tales have happy endings and I'm praying that this one will too. Perhaps Autumn will grow into an incredibly strong and loving woman who will be ever so grateful to have had such a strong and loving daddy in her life. She'll learn from these hard life lessons and be much better equipped for the big mean real world. My heart and love to both of them.
babe i haven't had the few good years in all this - it's all been bad, and i drop tears too - BUT - it ain't worth it. They see you cry, or they see your pain, and you can't hide what's in your eyes from a child - they know. just remind them there are still beautiful things in the world - and it sounds like you already do. best of luck hun. Here's hoping your story has a happy ending.
*sigh* I wish a hypothetical happy ending for everyone involved.
autumns nice and everything, but i prefer spring.
tjohafly <--- superfly's illegitemate son from the tiny island of "tjoha"
Oh my god this story is so extremely real it kills me. Ugh. :(
On the upside, it is strangely positive in that the two men are loving, supportive and understanding.
So you left me conflicted.
:( / :)
wow.
how old was aspen when you and mommy got divorced? did she need an explanation then?
no? hmmmm.....
man, i'd hate to be in your shoes, though i'm sure you'll find a way to make aspen feel better.
just out of curiousity (and you don't have to answer if you don't want to), did you and aspen's mom divorce for the same reason?
duff,
Autumn (not Aspen) was too young to remember when her mommy and daddy split up. Autmn's mommy suffers from depression which causes her to do desperate, foolish, amd selfish things in an ongoing struggle to maintain a sense of well being. The effects of this condition has caused Autumn's mommy to go through four marriages by her mid thirties.
excellent story brico! there are so many small things for inspiration that we sometimes overlook. one thing that coming up with all these crazy fake news articles and jokes have done is help me find inspiration in previously unfound areas.
i've been actively involved in some improv classes, lately i've been taking a standup comedy class (just for fun). but i have to do 3-5 minutes at a comedy cabaret. i find that i can't sell the crazy ideas that i put on banana blograma, i have to go to the source of the inspiration (the little observations that leads to the satire).
anyway, keep finding that inspiration to write great stuff! its a great process!
i knew that. autumn....autumn....autumn
not sure where "aspen" came from. perhaps i've been awake too long.
anyway, i figured she was probably too young to remember your split.
i'm not a fan of prozac, but it sounds like mommy needs...something.
and another marriage right away ain't it. (jeez- four marriages by her mid-30s? that means i should be on my second by now. uhm...no.
and i can't seem to close my parenthesis this evening, either.
argh.
ahh..
Ti voglio bene mio angelo..
Mara
Believe it or not, I feel for that sad, desperate Mommy. I know that she must feel horrible in the few moments of clarity that she might experience. It's a grueling, soul killing circle to be in... And you hope beyond hope that your own daughter does not fall into it... I can only hope that some day, some how, she can find her way to the other side of the circle.
o, my little heart.
your little heart.
Autumn is blessed to have two such strong, loving and supportive men in her life. She's in all our prayers, as well as the families surrounding her. Her Mama needs help, are y'all close enough to where she'd listen to you? She can't break the cycle without understanding it.
so Autumn's a real person, but she's not your daughter?
so Autumn's a real person, but she's not your daughter?
Why is it up to Autumn's dad to explain? It's enough that she knows he's a constant in her life.
Assuming the responsibility for the explanation takes the burden off Autumn's mom.
Autumn needs to hear this explanation from her mom. Autumn's dad can continue being loving, and being an ear and a warm embrace for whatever Autumn feeds back from the explanation.
Despite how sad the overall situation is, A is very lucky to have such caring and supportive men in her life. As a child of divorce myself, I can relate that the heartache made me more determined to be a better person/wife/mother than my parents were.
Good luck to A's daddy.